英语写作修改:Stay Positive and Optimistic in Life - 乐观的态度

原文:

Recently, I have seen an impressive film – Precious, which tells the growing experiences about a pretty fat black girl, Precious Jones, a girl living in the Harlem. The film reveals the poor and miserable life in the Harlem, but at the same time, it encourages people to take a positive and optimistic attitude to face it, no matter how difficult it is.

修改:

Recently I watched an impressive film, Precious, which is about the experience of a pretty, overweight girl by the name of Precious Jones, who lives and grows up in Harlem. The movie depicts the miserable life of poor residents in Harlem, but it also encourages people to take a positive and optimistic attitude toward life, no matter how hard it is to do so.

说明:

Harlem是纽约的一个地名,不需要the。A pretty fat girl,挺胖的女孩,还是a pretty fat girl,漂亮但较胖的女孩?另,overweight比fat更客气些。

原文:

Precious is so undereducated that she can not read and write formally. What’s worse, she is usually knocked around by her irascible mother. Worst of all, she is sexually assaulted by her stepfather and has two children before the age of seventeen. Owing to the situation she gets in#from  end#volved, she has to leave school and is introduced to alternative school. After waging many struggles and overcoming many difficulties, she finds the goals of life again with the help of her teacher and classmates.

修改:

Precious is so undereducated that she cannot read and write formally. She has an irascible, abusive mother who knocked her about frequently. Worse of all, Precious’s stepfather sexually assaulted her. Before she turned seventeen, Precious had gotten two children. Due to her situation, Previous had to leave her school and was placed in an alternative school for teenagers like her. After waging many battles and overcoming numerous difficulties, with the help of her teachers and classmates, Precious found purpose in life again.

原文:

In the film, Precious insists on keeping her children all the time though she gets involved in trouble. She has a firm belief that she can get rid of the past life and start the new one and she really makes it finally. Her insistence tells me that keeping positive and optimistic would make a great contribution to achieve dream.

修改:

In the film, Precious insists on keep her children all the way through her troubling times. She firmly believes that she can move beyond her past life and start anew, and in the end she succeeds. Her persistence shows makes clear that a positive and optimistic attitude helps us fulfill our dreams in life.

说明:

keeping positive and optimistic – keeping an positive and optimistic attitude。Insistence, persistence,perseverance。

原文:

In life, many people are easy to feel frustrated by meeting a bit of setback. As far as I am concerned, we need to learn to keep positive and optimistic when facing difficulties so that we have more power to keep and pursue our dreams.

修改:

Many of us get frustrated easily by small setbacks in life. We should learn to stay positive and optimistic when facing difficulties, so that we can have more power to pursue our dreams.

说明:

People are easy to feel frustrated – People get frustrated easily。As far as I am concerned  - 老套,用烂了,大家已经知道你在陈述观点。

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