英语写作修改:Job Application - 工作申请信

原文:

Director of Hp Department:

修改:

Dear HR Director:

说明:

HP > HR? Human Resources,人力部,人事部。

原文:

Having noticed the enclosed advertisement in this morning‘s World magazine, I hope to apply for the advertised position. I feel that I am competent to meet the requirements that your company has specified.

修改:

Having noticed the enclosed job ad in this morning's World magazine, I would like to appy for the advertised position. My credentials meet your requrements and I'm confident I can do a good job for your company.

说明:

打算申请,不是希望申请。I feel that太弱了,应直截了当。

原文:

I am twenty-seven years of age. After graduating from high school, I took a two-year business course in Beijing University of Chemical Science. Then I started to work in a lawyer’s office, where I am employed at present. I now hope to enter an office where the work requires greater individual responsibility and judgment than now, and where there are more opportunities for advancement.

修改:

I am twenty-seven years old. Upon graduating from high school, I took a two-year business course at Beijing University of Chemical Science. I currently work in a lawyer's office. I'm looking for work that requires more individual responsibility and provides better opportunities for career advancement.

说明:

年龄应该在简历里,不必说。Then I started to work in a lawyer’s office, where I am employed at present - 简化叙述。

原文:

If you desire references or more information regarding my experience, I shall be glad to give details upon request.  I should welcome a personal interview at your convenience. The following is my contact information…

Very truly yours,

修改:

Upon request,  I'd be happy to provide further information and references. I wish you would grant me an on-site job interview. Below please find my contact information.

Yours truly,

说明:

不是写诗,用什么省略号。

(原文作者:不详;修改评论:大家学 DJXUE.COM)