英语写作修改:Beijing - 北京

原文:

As the captain of China, Beijing has been the most popular city of china. So more and more people want to visit Beijing. I think the best time to visit Beijing is spring, for the weather of that time is very fine, neither too hot nor too cold. The warm wind will make you fell happy.

说明:

Captain, capital。

修改:

Beijing, the national capital of China, is the most popular city in the country. Nowadays more and more people want to visit Beijing. The best time to tour the city is spring, when weather is nice, neither too hot nor too cold, with gentle breeze putting you in a good mood.

原文:

Many people visit Beijing for it's beautiful sence and cultural inheritance .If you want to have a enjoyable journey ,I suggest you to pay a visit to the Great Wall,the Summer Palace ,the Olympic Park and many other place.When you feel tired after one day's journey ,you can taste the "Zha Jiang Mian",a kind of traditional food in Beijing.There are many other things you can do in Beijing,as shopping in the big shopping mall,visit the different kinds park ,and visit the"Si He Yuan".

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Many people visit Beijing for its beautiful sights and cultural heritage. To have an enjoyable and representational tour, you should definitely visit the Great Wall, Summer Palace, and Olympic Park, among other attractions. After a full day of sightseeing, you can re-energize yourself with a bowl of Zha Jiang Mian, which is a kind of noodle with local flavor. There are many other activities for you in Beijing - for example, shopping at malls, taking strolls in the city's numerous parks, and checking out a few traditional residential compounds known as Si He Yuan (quadrangles).

说明:

Cultural heritage比cultural inheritance更常用,指实在继承的物质和传统,inheritance更抽象,常指继承的行为。It's,its。A,an。Journey, tour, trip, visit。As,such as。

原文:

Beijing is China's second largest city,after Shanghai.It is a major transportation hub,with dozens of railways,roads and motorways passing through the city.It is also the focal point of many international flights to China.Beijing is recognised as the political,educational,and cultural center of he People's Republic of China,while Shanghai and Hong Kong predominate in economic fields.The city will host the 2008 Summer Olympics.

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Beijing is the second larget city in China (smaller than Shanghai). The city is an important transportation hub. Dozens of railways and highways converge here, and large numbers of flights link the city with destinations around the world. Whereas Shanghai and Hong Kong are mostly known for their economic strength, Beijing is the political, economic, and cultural center of China. The city will host the 2008 Olympic Games.

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