英语写作修改:China's Education - 中国的教育

原文:

some people believe that china’s education has paid too much attention to the examination score. as a result, it is very common that the students are always judged by their scores, and the decision for one’s promotion and study abroad is also made on the basis of the examination results. even teachers in middle schools and colleges have to teach the students that that will be tested, and students just want to learn what will be included in the exam. consequently, many students cannot well develop their ability.

修改:

Many people believe that China’s education put too much emphasis on test scores. Students are commonly judged by exam results, which often become basis for decisions on scholarships and study-abroad opportunities. School teachers and college professors constantly remind their students that they will be tested, and students are more concerned with what will appear in exams. As result, students have little time to develop real abilities.

说明:

Examination scores, test scores, exam results,词汇多样化。As result没必要。Very common和always重复。学生有什么promotion? Even teachers … 这里没有even的意思。

原文:

other people argue that the examination scores is still an important criterion in making a decision. for example, whether the students can go university or not should be decided by the score. whether a person should be given a chance to study abroad can be determined by the score. at present examination score is widely accepted as a fair means in decision-making.

修改:

Others argue that exam performance is a legitimate consideration in decision-making. For example, college admissions should be based on scores. So should be the decision on granting opportunities to study abroad. At present exam results are still widely accepted as a fair means to evaluate students.

说明:

Other people, others。Go university, go to。Decided, decided partly。

原文:

in my opinion, examination score is really important. if i cannot get enough score, i will not be able to receive the degree. but i do hope that examination score and one’s performance should be combined to evaluate one’s study and work. this might be fairer.

修改:

In my view, test scores are truly important. Without a decent grade, I won’t be able to get my degree. Still, I hope that both test scores and one’s performance in other areas should be viewed together when evaluating students. That would be a fairer way to go about the task.

说明:

Enough score,good grades, score high enough。Without a decent grade, I …换换句式。

翻译:

许多人认为中国教育过于强调考试成绩。学生们的评定通常基于他们的考试分数,奖学金和留学等决定也常常取决于考试成绩。中学老师和大学教授不断提醒学生们他们必须应考,学生就只学考试中可能出现的内容。这样学生们就没有什么时间真正开发自己的能力。

其他有些人则认为考试成绩确实重要。比如大学录取和留学机会方面的决定就应该基于考试分数。目前考试分数仍被广泛接受,作为评估学生的一个公平指标。

我认为,考试分数真的重要。如果我没有好的考试成绩,我就不能取得学位。但是,我还是希望有关机构评估学生是会把分数和学生的其它表现结合起来。那样就更合理一些。
(原文作者:未详;修改评论:大家学 DJXUE.COM)