英语写作修改:Self Employment - 自我雇佣

原文:

Self employment could bring many advantages. One of the advantages of being self-employed is that the profit the business makes belongs to the owner. If the self-employed person succeeds in business, he has the chance to earn a great deal of money. The profit earned is the reward for the owner’s effort, ability and creativity. Thus, a second advantage is that a person’s intelligence and abilities have a direct effect on the earnings. A third advantage of being self-employed is that a person can control his working hours. While not all self-employed people are completely free, most of them have more control over this area than the salaried people.

修改:

Self-employment has many advantages. One benefit of being self-employed is that the owner gets all the profit generated by his or business. So, if the business is a success, the self-employed person stands to make a great deal of money. This is the reward for the owner’s effort, ability, and creativity.
Additionally, a self-employed person can control his own working hours. To be sure, not all self-employed people can keep flexible schedules, but most of them have more control over this area of their life than salaried employees and wage-earners.

说明:

“Has advantages” instead of “bring advantages”。“One of the advantages”,“advantage”字重复。“Thus, a second advantage is that” – 既然用“thus”,说明这不是一个并列的概念,不是第一第二。后边就用“additionally”。Salaried是白领雇员,wage earners是体力工人。

原文:

However, being self-employed is not without problems. First, being one’s own boss places the responsibility directly on that individual shoulders. Everyone has some weaknesses in a certain aspects. These weaknesses will affect how successful a self-employed person is. Second, though the self-employed can earn considerable profits with a successful business, losses can force them out of business and sometimes, place them in debt. A third disadvantage concerns income security. Self-employed people have no guaranteed wage. Their earnings can vary greatly, depending on business conditions. Salaried people, however, can generally count on continued earnings.

修改:

However, self-employment is not without problems. Being one’s own boss places great responsibility on one’s own shoulders. First, everyone has certain weaknesses, and these shortcomings may very well determine the success or failure of a self-employed person. Secondly, although self-employment can potentially lead to great earnings, failure of one’s own business can easily drive a self-employed person out of work and place them in debt. Thirdly, there is the issue of income security. Self-employed people have no guaranteed wages. Their earnings can vary greatly, depending on business conditions. Those who work for salaries or wages, however, can generally count on continued payments.

原文:

In addition, salaried people often enjoy fringe benefits that mean greater peace of mind. One of these benefits may be insurance paid for by the employer that continues the employee’s salary in the event of sickness or accident while many self-employed people do not have such protection.

修改:

Moreover, salaried people often enjoy fringe benefits, which mean greater peace of mind. One of these benefits is the insurance paid by the employer so that workers will continue to be compensated in the event of illnesses or accidents. Many self-employed people has no such protection.

翻译:

自主创业有许多好处,其中之一是创业的收入全部归于自我雇佣的业主。如果生意不错,创业人可以挣到大钱。这是对于业主努力、能力和创造力的回报

再者,自主创业的人可以控制自己的工作时间。当然不是所有自营生意的人能够有灵活的日程,但比起拿工资给他人干活的雇员工人,他们中的大多数在这么还是有较大的控制。

不过,创业自雇也不是没有问题。自己当老板就是自己承担责任。首先,我们每一个人都有自己的弱点,这些弱点很可能决定一个自主创业人员的成败。第二,虽然自雇的人有可能挣到较多的钱,如果他的生意失败,他就会事业并陷入债务。第三,还有一个收入稳定性的问题。自雇的人没有收入保证。他们的收益差别很大,取决于生意的好坏。相比之下,拿工资的人通常可以指望持续的报偿。

进一步来说,拿工资的人还有其它边际福利,这些福利让人更安心。其中的一个福利是雇主支付的保险,有了这种保险,雇员在生病或出了事故时仍能有些收入。许多自雇的人就没有这样的保护。