英语写作修改:Wealth and Life - 财富与生活

原文:

Affluence is the thing most people are longing for all their lives. to pursue wealth is their goal of life. feeling confidence that money is one of the most wonderful things in the world, they try various ways to earn as much as possible.

修改:

Many people go after wealth all their lives. Affluence is their life-long goal. Confident that money is the most wonderful thing in the world, they try to get as much of it as possible.

说明:

Most,鸟为食尽,人为财亡,可能大多数人确实如此,many就没有那么悲观。Affluence是富裕的状态,富裕的阶级等等,wealth是财富本身。Feeling confidence that money is ...,they ... - Confident that money is ...,they ...。

原文:

Considering what it is like to be rich, people think it would be considerably enjoyable. the life is not as boring as before, but is filled with variety. every day is fresh and passionate, because money can help them to do different things.

修改:

People often view money as the answer to all problems in life. They believe that, with money, life will become far more enjoyable. Life will be full of excitement; it will never be boring again. Money will make it possible for them to do anything. It allows them to follow their passions, so every single day will be fresh and new.

说明:

Considering,considerably,重复,另选词。Every day is fresh and passionate - 人passionate,日子本身没有激情。

原文:

They can rush into department stores to purchase lots of expensive clothes and cosmetics without glancing at the prices. they can afford the dear expenses of entertainment, so their life is wonderful and colorful. luxurious furniture, high –quality household appliances and comfortable housing conditions provide a convenient and easy life for them. they don’t have to worry about economic problems. for them ,enjoying the material abundance is more important.

修改:

Pepole feel that, with money, they can rush to department stores to buy expensive clothes and cosmetics any time they want. They do not have to think about prices or even glance at price tags. They can afford all kinds of entertainment, so their life will just be so wonderful and all rosy. Their new life-style will feature large houses, luxurious furniture, high-quality household appliances, all that sort of things that make their life so much easier and more comfortable. They do not have to worry about their finances anymore, and all there is in their life is the enjoyment of material abundance.

说明:

Economy是经济,finance是财务,这里指的是后者。

原文:

What;s more, wealth brings them a higher social position. they use a little amount of money to patronize the poor and win some respect and good reputation. it seems that the rich life is exciting and happy.

修改:

What's more, wealth will bring them high social standings. They can use a little of their money to patronize the poor and win some respect and fame. Surely, the life of the rich is simply exciting and full of happiness.

说明:

The rich life is exciting and happy - The life of the rich is ...

原文:

However, things are not as good as they expected. when they get money, they are afraid of the safety of money. the thieves and robbers are their enemies, who annoy them so much that they often have nightmares at nights. sometimes, the sharp contrast between material abundance and the spiritual poverty makes the feel oppressed and depressed.

修改:

In reality, however, things are not as good as people fancy. When people get money, they have to safeguard it. Thieves and robbers are their enemies, whose threat keeps them awake in their beds and give them nightmares when they do fall asleep. In some cases, the gap between material wellbeing and spiritual poverty make people feel oppressed and depressed.

说明:

they are afraid of the safety of money - 他们担心,而不是害怕,钱的安全,they worry about the safety of their money。Annoy只是有点儿讨厌,还不至于让人晚上睡做噩梦;threat,menace使人恐惧。

原文:

So money is not always associated with happiness. they despise the poor, but they envy their pure happiness of the simple life. the more money they have, the more they worry. they usually think how to spend the money in future, which bothers them a lot. then they realize that wealth brings them so many troubles. to be rich is not as attractive as they have imagined.

修改:

So, money is not always associated with happiness. The rich may despise the poor, but their envy the simplicity of a poor man's life. The more money people have, the more they worry. After a while, just thinking about ways to spend money bothers them to no end. That's when they realize how much trouble money can bring them. To be rich is not as appealing as many people imagine.

说明:

So money is not always associated with happiness. they despise the poor - “they”指代不清。they despise the poor, but they envy their pure happiness of the simple life - 穷人的生活就有那么多的pure happiness? 大概可以说they envy the simplicity of the poor men's life。they usually think how to spend the mone - contantly think about。

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